Delusional




Dressing up for their anniversary dinner-- flowing chiffon with a ruby pendant around her neck. Smoked salmon, chardonnay, his loving gaze!

Doorbell interrupts the piano playing in her head. Cheeks ablaze, she peeks through the keyhole.

A white lily stares.

No red roses?

Mom?

Yes, darling.

Mascara runs.




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  1. How sad for her that he isn't coming!

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  2. The build up, love it. I enjoyed the constant reminders of red. I pictured your MC's anticipation. And the ending, though a little predictable by your title, still caught me off guard as I didn't take the title into account. The denouement though, was not very clear to me. It left me with a lot of questions.

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    1. Thanks Joshua for taking time to review!Maybe,I should've included more subtle hints but I wanted to leave things unsaid which is hard for me.Trying to get better at that.

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  3. I like the way you used short, punchy sentences to emphasise the sense of disconnect in this piece.

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  4. the last line made my eyes moist.

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  5. Nice use of the lily as a symbol!

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  6. Beautiful work here! Those last few solitary lines really drive the message home.

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